Artamis of Sparta

Name: Artamis

Age: looks 18

Race: Half Devil

Affinity: Neutral

Residence: Any place that is quiet

Battle Style: Artamis uses a mixed fighting style of Dante's and Vergil's combined with his own method of gunman-ship and swordsmanship

Weapons: 3 swords, 2 hand guns, 2 revolvers


Good Qualities: A kind heart

Bad Qualities: Gets cocky at times

Appearence: Avitar

History: Artamis is an was orphan from a pore small village in the Old West , he often dreamed of becoming an outlaw like his father. So he left his town and trained for 11 years traveling from city to city challenging any swordsman or gunslinger he could find. He later became one of the most known outlaws takeing what he won in duels and doing what he loved most pissing people off.Other then a few broken bones his enemies live to tell who beat them so more will come for a fight.After a few years of cracking skulls he overhears that his entire town was destroyed by a curopted sherif. Now fueled with revenge Artamis seeks for ultimate power to destroy the the evil around the world.While on his quest for power he finds an old blacksmith, the blacksmith offers Artamis to make him a pair of guns if he would be his apprentice.Artamis agrees to the obligation, after months of training and hard work the old blacksmith made two powerful gun swords for Artamis before the old man passed away.Artamis lives one useing the same gun sword the old man forged he named them Karin, and Greg named after his brother and sister.Artamis travled from contry to contry looking for the people who killed his family diskiseing himself as a bounty hunter for hire so as to not be noticed by the humans.But threw it all he found out that the man who killd his family and distroyed his village was known as Virgel the son of Sparta himself, know knowing this information from a jipsy Artamis serches for the son of sparta so as to slay him and allow his familys serits to rest in peace.

Strangths:The will to live and to kill Virgel

Weekness:if he sees any one wo looks like his family members he freezes up in shouk and horrer, pluse isnt able to swim.

Picture:

Ummmm, yeah. Sorry bout the late response. Been busy. (WE NEED ANOTHER MOD!)

Yeeeeeeeeeahno. I'm seeing some major problems here. First of all, we need a description for the appearance, but thats the least of your worries. Major and rampant spelling errors in the history. Also we need a physical weakness in the bad qualities section. Also, weapons belong in the weapons creation board. Other than that this is fine.

could you show me an example pleas so i can make it approvable?

Just poke around the Character Creation board. Plenty of examples to choose from. Such as this fine profile: https://devilmaycry.forumotion.co.uk/character-creation-f1/alexiel-custom-t65.htm

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Alright, it looks a lot better but I'm going to need a physical weakness in the bad qualities such as "Weak against holy weapons" or "Little resistance to fire". Also, you say he is a Half-Devil and yet you never make mention of that in the history. Remember, Half-Devils would most likely be discriminated against if they are discovered. Humans fear them. Make these little changes and you're home free.

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I'd raise complaints about the spelling errors, but thats just me being a grammer nazi. I see no problems that are big enough to keep you from getting accepted.

It gets my seal of approval:


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o_o....um wtf?!